I think you’re a good writer, in that you form sentences well, and you understand how the language works, and your prose is not stilted or boring. The problem I personally had, mostly with the previous two entries in this series, was that the “meat”—the interesting bits telling me what you had concluded, and why, and how to apply it, and how (specifically) you have applied it - seemed very spread out among a lot of filler or elaboration. I couldn’t tell what you were eventually going to arrive at, and whether it’d be of use or interest to me. Too much generality, perhaps: compare “this made my life better” with “by doing X I caught myself thinking Y and changed this to result in the accomplishment of Z.”
I tell you this only in case you are interested in constructive criticism from yet another perspective; some undoubtedly consider the things I have mentioned virtues in an author. In any case, I have upvoted this article; it doesn’t deserve a negative score, I think—long-winded, maybe; poorly done or actively irrational, certainly not. The ideas are interesting, the methodology is reasonable, and the effort is appreciated.
I think you’re a good writer, in that you form sentences well, and you understand how the language works, and your prose is not stilted or boring. The problem I personally had, mostly with the previous two entries in this series, was that the “meat”—the interesting bits telling me what you had concluded, and why, and how to apply it, and how (specifically) you have applied it - seemed very spread out among a lot of filler or elaboration. I couldn’t tell what you were eventually going to arrive at, and whether it’d be of use or interest to me. Too much generality, perhaps: compare “this made my life better” with “by doing X I caught myself thinking Y and changed this to result in the accomplishment of Z.”
I tell you this only in case you are interested in constructive criticism from yet another perspective; some undoubtedly consider the things I have mentioned virtues in an author. In any case, I have upvoted this article; it doesn’t deserve a negative score, I think—long-winded, maybe; poorly done or actively irrational, certainly not. The ideas are interesting, the methodology is reasonable, and the effort is appreciated.