Really like the song! Best AI generation I’ve heard so far. Though I might be biased since I’m a fan of Kipling’s poetry: I coincidentally just memorised the source poem for this a few weeks ago, and also recently named my blog after a phrase from Hymn of Breaking Strain (which was already nicely put to non-AI music as part of Secular Solstice).
I noticed you had added a few stanzas of your own:
As the Permian Era ended,
we were promised a Righteous Cause, To fight against Oppression or
take back what once was ours.
But all the Support for our Troops
didn’t stop us from losing the war
And the Gods of the Copybook Headings
said “Be careful what you wish for.”
In Scriptures old and new, we
were promised the Good and the True
By heeding the Authorities
and shunning the outcast few But our bogeys and solutions
were as real as goblins and elves
And the Gods of the Copybook Headings
said “Learn to think for yourselves.”
Kipling’s version has a particular slant to which vices it disapproves of, so I appreciate the expansion. The second stanza is great IMO, but the first stanza sounds a bit awkward in places. I had some fun messing with it:
As the Permian Era ended, we were promised the Righteous Cause. In the fight against Oppression, we could ignore our cherished Laws, Till righteous rage and fury made all rational thought uncouth. And the Gods of the Copybook Headings said “The crowd is not the truth”
Really like the song! Best AI generation I’ve heard so far. Though I might be biased since I’m a fan of Kipling’s poetry: I coincidentally just memorised the source poem for this a few weeks ago, and also recently named my blog after a phrase from Hymn of Breaking Strain (which was already nicely put to non-AI music as part of Secular Solstice).
I noticed you had added a few stanzas of your own:
Kipling’s version has a particular slant to which vices it disapproves of, so I appreciate the expansion. The second stanza is great IMO, but the first stanza sounds a bit awkward in places. I had some fun messing with it: